I’m in the desert right now
with a winter coat on and
Only you know why.
So you don’t forget me
I wrote you a new poem
for the next 365 days.
There’s no need for
you to read them, though.
They all say what I said before:
I love you and I wish
you’d leave him.
Some may think
I write this to woo
but really it’s to steal.
I’m a romantic criminal
An imposter, a fake.
I wanted someone else’s
future. That’s what this has all been from the start.
But I’m giving up here.
I have no more words
so if you don’t hear from me
in the next 18 hours or so
just know I’m walking
in the desert alone
with a winter coat on
and I’m cold.
There is a beautiful honestly in these words… “Some may think I write this to woo but really it’s to steal.”
Yes, a bit of a try at confessional poetry. But I must also confess I just watched The Notebook for the first time. I’m behind on my love stories, it seems.
Haha, confessing about your confessional poetry… I like it 😉
WOW!!! Mic drop. Falling, not landing. The best part… that wonderful frightening feeling in the stomach. How do you keep blowing readers’ minds!?!? It’s like watching a story unfold.
I’ll just have to smile to this 🙂 Thanks for all your words!
I’m glad, for it’s very well meant. And thanks for all of yours. 🙂
This poem is wonderful, from the start to the end. The flow of the story in the poem is great. A sense of honest reflection and hope. Well done man, keep it up 🙌
Wow, I love this! Well-written!
Thanks for the support!
Oh man. I love this. And in my own way I can relate to some of it. So good!!
Thanks, Tara. It really means so much to me when you appreciate some of my work. It’s nice you could relate to these feelings.
I honestly can’t think of a piece of yours I did NOT like. You’re an excellent poet who creates such easily felt emotions, often in very few lines. I enjoy seeing your posts in my feed.
Thanks again for that, Tara. And I can honestly say the same about you, the way you set a scene, you’re relatabilty, your choice of words and the chances you take with form … I would not be telling the truth if I didn’t say that you have made me rethink the way I approach my writing. Thanks for being the writer and person you are!
Thank you. Seriously, so very much. So often I consider shutting this whole blog down and then I get a nice comment like this and it gives me a little hope again.
You’re welcome. It’s a good blog you have, however don’t let it stress you out either. Hope is one of the best feelings 🙂
WOW! so lovely! The expressions (read confessions) – mesmerizing!
Beautifully done, Benjamin. 🙂
hahaha i love this goshh
Creativity is mind blowing. If she reads this , she’s gonna coming back running. Cheers ..
Oh, thanks for saying so. Maybe you’re right!
You are welcome.
Indeed, I am.
I like your style! If you’d ever consider submitting some of your work for publication, Dixie State University has an online literary journal and is currently open for submissions. You can check us out at R7Review.com. The deadline to submit this year is November 6th.
We also accept photography, audio recordings, visual art, fiction, multimedia, nonfiction, etc.
Thanks a lot!
Honesty galore, loved it as a confessional. Beautiful work.
THANKS SO MUCH! I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. I haven’t written much confessional poetry but thought to try one. Thanks a lot again!