Once

Once I thought you were a zero
The queen of numbers
Able to morph all things within
Yet leave them changeless

But like the number zero
Unfortunately you have an ability
To make all things around you
Equal your value

And once I thought you were just a pest
But Iโ€™ve come to realize
You are much more like a
pestilence

Only you
Can turn
Every thing
Into no thing

29 comments on “Once

  1. Secrets says:

    Wow Ben! I really like this, from the protagonist’s piercing insight to the way you have structured it and that last stanza ๐Ÿ‘Œ

  2. judeitakali says:

    Heartbreaking. Gorgeous writing

  3. wardah says:

    Wow this is amazing! I love how you take certain elements and transform their meaning into something else. This is beautiful ๐Ÿ‘

  4. ๐Ÿ‘‹hey there…just stopping by to say that your poems are wonderful๐Ÿคฉ
    Greetings,
    RushaโœŒ

  5. Lia says:

    Very painful from a sensitive reader perspective, hatefully reverent, and/but brilliant, Benjamin โค๏ธŽ๐Ÿ’˜๐Ÿ™๐ŸŒท

    • bejamin4 says:

      Very painful from a sensitive writer perspective, too. it’s not always fun to write of sorrow or dislike. But the world has glamorized doom and gloom for writers. Sometimes I wish I ever did was write another love poem. I might be happiest this way. Thanks for sharing your inner thoughts. Always nice to know what you think.

      • Lia says:

        I totally agree! Sorry did not see this till now. The offline homefront is hopping and I miss a lot of things these days. Anyway, yes I completely agree and it’s so important to express feelings honestly, you do it in a completely brilliant way as always.

  6. Garima Rawat says:

    Only you can turn everything into no thing…love that!

  7. Thatโ€™s wonderful writing. ๐Ÿ™‚

  8. You made the pain and sorrow resonate in this one, Benjamin. This is some really powerful writing. You did a great job! โœจโœจ

    • bejamin4 says:

      Super-sized thank you. I like how you used “pain” and “sorrow” instead of hate. I think this is more about hurt than hate. Have a wonderful rest of your day!

  9. That’s honest and direct, and brave too. I wish to sometimes write this courageously too, and may be I will someday, forgetting about how much it will hurt some people. But then it hurts more within first. Isn’t it?

    • bejamin4 says:

      Yes, you’re right. The hurt starts from within. The pen can bring it out, if tears don’t first. Thanks for commenting. I always liked the idea of “creating dangerously”. But it’s not always the easiest thing to do as you say.

  10. Extreme polarities depicted so beautifully Benjamin ๐Ÿ’™

  11. cheriewhite says:

    Touching, heartbreaking, but very well-written!

  12. Oooft! That third verse!!
    Brilliant!! ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ–ค

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