You Can’t Love Me

You can’t love me
There’s no chance
Built a wall around my heart
Surrounded by a cage
And then a bunch of booby traps
Don’t try to force your way through
I’m no boyfriend, no part-time lover
Not even qualified for a one-night stand
I’m one-hundred-percent husband material
So don’t blow me a kiss
I’ll just blow it away
Mi casa es no su casa
My house is not your house
My house is hers, just hers, always hers.

48 comments on “You Can’t Love Me

  1. wardah says:

    Love the twist on the Spanish quote. And hey, everyone can be loved!

  2. uzzawal1911 says:

    Haha, this is nice! Much commitment and much love. Nice one 🙌

  3. Absolutely beautiful 😊💖

  4. Seoul Sister says:

    Your poems are like songs, they stay in my mind, very beautiful thoughts. Loyalty is sexy😘💖🙏🌷

  5. Lia says:

    Awwww!!! This is so sweet to your lady. So black and white, which hints at shades of grey. You’ll have to beat them off with a stick after this one Benjamin! Well done!

    • bejamin4 says:

      Thanks a lot. I think the point of the poem was to beat them away; shouldn’t have to use a stick on anyone. And, of course, never would. But I understand your perspective completely. It’s almost like a reverse psychology poem in that way. But that was not my intention. However, they do say the reader owns half the rights to a piece of art. When it’s out in the universe it’s no longer yours, per se.

      • Lia says:

        I didn’t mean the stick part literally, comment too quickly typed again perhaps. Absolutely, they do say that. The amount of ethical responsibility we take for our own work (and the possible interpretation of our comments, I suppose?) is up to us. I tend to take (real or imagined) personal jibes and such pretty seriously, which causes me more pain than anyone intended (well, at least I like to hope, in retrospect). Best wishes, fine work. 😚🙏💛

      • bejamin4 says:

        I know you didn’t mean it literally. It’s a common phrase; I understand completely. Sorry I made you think I was being literal. Tone can get lost in translation in a digital age. Everything is personal to an extent. It’s not really possible to be completely objective in anything, as you’re always pulling from your individual experience. So it makes sense. But, of course, somethings are still only fiction. Hard to always know the real from the fake though. Thanks again. Best wishes to you also!

  6. kingkendi says:

    The twist on the last line, whew! I really love this poem. Wonderful creation. 💯👎🏾

  7. yassy says:

    Nice way of proposing .. she say yes, no ? She will eventually. You are a sweet persuasive guy , Javier Bardem..
    I am curious about this lady of yours. I would give her a piece of my mind and get her down on her knees to propose back. Howsz that , Benj???

  8. Love this! Love the ‘part time lover’ line!! Well done!! ❤️

  9. Wow. I like this so much💕

  10. cheriewhite says:

    Beautiful poem, Benjamin! Love the mistress story behind it! 🙂

  11. The last two lines are my favourite! Very well written, Benjamin. ✨✨

  12. “always hers,” OUCH. So beautifully heartbreaking. Wish everyone loved like this. 💜✨

  13. Katy Claire says:

    An exciting and passionate write! I agree with Judy that your verses have a musical quality to them. Very sweet message ♥️

    • bejamin4 says:

      Thanks, really. I try to write everything with the idea of it being read aloud. If it doesn’t sound readable aloud then I never think it sounds quite right to me.

  14. Sang says:

    So nice. You have so nicely rejected the girl.

  15. So tell me, how much time will it take me to climb that wall?

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