83 comments on “Unsuccessful

  1. crimsonposy says:

    Powerful, sorrowful, and catchy, all at once. You did those few words justice!

  2. So creative and unique. LOVE it!πŸ’•

  3. You convey so much in just a few words Ben. This reflects a sense of sadness.

  4. VJ Knutson says:

    Awww….cuts right to the heart.

  5. Sonali says:

    Few words but so awesome! β™₯

  6. Brilliant!!! πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ–€πŸ–€

  7. gabychops says:

    Look here Benjamin, show that wretched girl my comment. She should be back in a hurry, because she may not find another man like you, so kind, compassionate and clever, as there isn’t many men like you around.


    • Jonna, I really appreciate your words and that you’re in my corner supporting me. However, I should say that this poem isn’t really about any one person in particular and it’s more all inclusive in the sense of missing someone. And I do think that sometimes relationships end and we realize we really love those people more than we even thought possible and we will take them with us for the rest of our lives. Real love is hard to move on from. Thanks for reading.

  8. Benjamin, another lovely, succinct verse. Your talent continues to amaze me! 🌞

  9. Ace says:

    Wow Ben, this is so powerful and leaped right into my heart. In my eyes, you’re very successful for vulnerably writing about deep emotion in such a beautiful and graceful way. I really love this piece and the simplicity of it, so well done!!! And as your friend, keep taking care of your loving heart and keep being incredibly YOU πŸ€—πŸ–€πŸ€πŸ’«

    • Thank you, Ace! I appreciate all your generosity and support. I can’t tell you how much it means in truth, but it sure means more than a lot. I appreciate minimalism whenever possible, so it’s cool you said “simplicity”. Thanks so much again!!! πŸ–€ πŸ™‚ 🀍

      • Ace says:

        Awww you’re more than welcome, Ben!! Always supporting you, my lovely friend! πŸ€—πŸ–€

  10. Ben, this little “unsuccessful” poem says so much in such few words..Conveys in such a powerful way, your struggles to let her go….In the end it’s not just about poetry…it’s about your heart, your life.. ∫beautiful, touching and so relatable too…πŸ€—πŸ€—πŸ€—

  11. Simmi says:

    Simple but says everything! Beautiful! πŸ™‚

  12. Secrets says:

    Heartbreakingly beautiful

  13. A very powerful poem and such economy.

    It does take time. You think you are over the worst and then … πŸ’›

    • Thanks!!! Yes, some times it can take time and more time. And sometimes you just never get over it and you it changes you forever. But change is what we always must accept, one way or another. πŸ’› Appreciate you! Have a wonderful Sunday!

  14. Aarushi says:

    what a nice first poem that’s not about someone. well written, Ben!

  15. Sunra Rainz says:

    But an excellent poetic form that expresses your what you don’t say so well ❀

  16. Sunra Rainz says:

    Gosh, I can’t seem to type correct sentences today! I meant to write: But an excellent poetic form that expresses your message, and what you don’t say, so well πŸ™‚ Positive energy to you, Ben!

  17. Rahul Gaur says:

    Excellent expression right here!

  18. Very succinctly and movingly expressed!

  19. uzzawal1911 says:

    Beautiful haha, loved it. Simple yet powerful.

  20. Lia says:

    Good one haha!

  21. Kritika says:

    Clever write.

  22. michnavs says:

    ahhh i feel this…even with the very few words..

  23. This is heartbreakingly beautiful ❀️

  24. a.s. says:

    Simple but wow wow wow. Amazing. Hope you’re able to meet with the person again!

  25. I feel you there…

  26. Marlapaige says:

    I love the honesty and rawness. Thank you

  27. Such simple words, yet they rip out the floor from underneath me.
    I guess that’s what art is.

  28. Reblogged this on With The Dying Daisy and commented:
    Always look forward to your poetry.

  29. Lokesh Sastya says:

    I’m unable to write any comment. Can you please tell me whom you refer to as β€œyou”?

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